« Dhamaalriffic | Main | Un/sexy naked massage »
March 01, 2006
A poem
Des and I went to the GuyWriters poetry group tonight... had a fun time... we didn't bring any of our work, though, so I thought I'd post a piece here. Comments?
relationshiptorpid both, tight shuddering we curled-in
keep ourselves apart from your
quiet chest and my silent torsochasmal inches separate the united
states of you from the people's republic of meforeign policy remains crumbs of half-eaten
distrust, flocks of herons paralyzed
in standing waters, and today's forecast
is cloudy, stormful, gray and blacks
as white as wedding veils.unreliably cartons burst open
lids blast back in overwraught
attempts to escape the fear's gravitymuffle anamneses through this
rehearsal of ancient auto-biographies,
parental wallops and near-death pandemonium.i came to show you this, your caduceus
reflect, not replace, you, physician
dangling immediately before your face
you see not me, not you, but wholenessgift-wrapped in annihilation and panic,
grab it!and don't hold on
Posted by Josh A. at March 1, 2006 12:56 AM
Comments
I like the part about herons and wedding veils. You can feel wind moving. I had to look up anamneses and caduceus! I think "dangling immediately before your face / you see not me, not you, but wholeness / gift-wrapped in annihilation and panic" prettu much sums up my own realization of commitment's meaning; I really identify with that line. I think. By my reading, anyway. The "and don't hold on" feels sad. Nice one, Josh.
Posted by: Ari Moore at March 2, 2006 07:20 AM